User:Honeybee15/Homelessness in the United States/TheAlexRodriguez Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Honeybee15
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Honeybee15/sandbox

Lead
Area:

Your lead is strong, although I do not understand your reasoning on cutting off the line " Homelessness is a public welfare and health epidemic within the United States."

I think that first sentence is a good sentence that can help follow your actual lead! I see that this article is already well established but I appreciate the implementation of the morality aspect of housing and the addition that housing is a social determinate.

Sector:

I appreciate the concise and clear lead for your subsection Housing First Approach especially because it made it easier to understand. I also love the addition to the tailored care approach and the benefits it provides

Content


 * The content seems up to date! The content you are adding to the paragraphs (for the area) definitely do add substance to the article and it also helps that your sources and enriching and fairly new. For your sector, the initiatives you are talking about are really comprehensive and do add more substance to the article itself.

Tone and Balance

 * The tone is neutral. There are no seemingly words that make your information seem biased!

Sources and References

 * All the sources are really up to date and reliable! I appreciate the newness of the research you are using. Kudos!

Overall impressions

 * Overall the information you are adding (and taking) is enriching to the article, even if it is already established. I would suggest thinking about the need to cut off the first sentence of the article. Aside from that, I love these theme and I agree with the approaches you are bringing in!