User:Honga2/Discovery and settlement of Hawaii/Jrblinkoo Peer Review

I could not find your draft which is fine (I was in a very similar spot to you for a while). First, I really liked your choice of an article because I think that Hawaii is often overlooked and is much different from other parts of the Americas. I am going to give insight into what I think you could improved the article. First, the "Ancient Hawaiian Population" section to me could be changed. From I understand, people lived in Hawaii for a long period of time, and yet, in the section, it starts out by mentioning the colonist instead of talking about the indigenous population. This is something overall that I noticed about your article, but I find it strange that it mostly talks about population. It feels very numerical when it could be talking about the cultures that lived there. It looks it does mention that radiocarbon data is used to find the ancient population, but I think it would be beneficial to look at other forms of archeological data and what those implications are. In the western contact section, I found the whaling part irrelevant and maybe you could look at another example with western contact. Moreover, you probably know more than me here, but I have heard that agriculture was really important to Hawaii's history -- this might be past the time line that you are looking at. Finally, it is odd to me that the article ended in the population numbers which indicates that the article needs to be restructured. Overall there is a lot possibilities, and if you need any clarifications for anything or want me to look at your article later when you are more along. I am more than happy to help!