User:Hoonji2022/American green tree frog/Elwhoelwu Peer Review

The entry was jam packed with information. My favorite section was the section on mating calls. It was extremely thorough and leaves me not wondering more. The language was concise and if detail was needed it was thoroughly explained so as to be accessible to a general audience. In the other sections I made changes to wording. These changes include: passive to active voice, grammar, and stylistic. I also truncated and broke sentences in half where I thought the information belonged in two separate sentences.

Here's what I noted for each of the sections:

Lead

Changed the wording of the lead section. I made sentences more concise. Many sentences that used “either/or” and “and” were replaced with “and” and commas respectively. I also added areas that I believed need citations. I believe some of the concepts mentioned in the lead such as: satellites, female interception, and androgenic effects of vocalization are too specific for the lead and bog down readers.

“To avoid predation, the species will often hide in its aquatic territory” this is vague

Multiple unrelated topics are discussed in single sentences e.g. “It is the state amphibian of Georgia and Louisiana and can be used as bioindicators for aquatic contamination.” These sentences can be broken up into paragraphs for clarity.

Description

Changed sentences from passive to active voice.

This sentence is confusing, “Such a range in coloration accounts for false encounters of the frog by other species.”

Changed green tree frog/treefrog to American green tree frog for consistency.

Distribution and Habitat

Not necessary to change, but omit jargon e.g. monotypic, clinal variation.

Breeding

Quotes need to be summarized instead of quoted

Not totally sure but I think mating and egg-laying are not considered forms of parental investment because they are prerequisites to parental investment

Mating Calls

This section is easy to read and information dense, good job!

Enemies

“To combat predation, green tree frog tadpoles may increase hiding behavior while in water to avoid capture” this is unclear

Physiology

Androgens are not a source of energy, the paper cited says that CORT levels increase and DHT levels decrease due to the drain on energy vocalization causes.

“Androgens, such as dihydrotestosterone and testosterone, are the primary energy resource for American green tree frogs when engaging in acoustic signal calling. When a male frog engages in vocalization either for aggression or mate attraction, androgen energy stores are used and become depleted.” This needs to be changed

Elwhoelwu (talk) 00:15, 19 October 2022 (UTC)

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