User:HornNest/Violeta Parra/Trevor008 Peer Review

General info
HornNest
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Editing User:HornNest/Violeta Parra - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Violeta Parra - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good job of trying to neutralize the tone of the article, there are sentences in the existing article that sound a bit persuasive. Awesome job at critiquing the lack of citations for some of the claims, especially pertaining to Violeta's childhood.

Overall, many of the statements unfortunately do not have citations, if none can be found, it is probably best to omit the statement altogether. If these expansions to the article are made, some expansion to the lead would be necessary, like mentions of her travels.

I think summaries of her music are better than the analyses that are given, much more neutral.

Make sure that when you omit or add information, to try and make sure that there is as much balance as possible. I fear that due to the lack of sources regarding her childhood, that it may be largely neglected, although there may be no problem in citing.