User:Hotpink789!/Chris Hoofnagle/Penguinblueberry Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hotpink789!

Chris Hoofnagle
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Hotpink789!/Chris Hoofnagle
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes - I might add a sentence that outlines the different consumer privacy contributions?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Yes, the information about whether or not young people like privacy is not included in the sections
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * It is concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, but i wonder if there could be any information added about Hoofnagle's background/position before you begin talking about his contributions to the field

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

No large tone / balance problems. Is there any controversy related to this man? If so, maybe include that?

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

Content is backed up by reliable sources of information & sources are relatively current given that not everything the article references is current. Links work.

Organization
Guiding questions:

Yes -

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes - I might add a sentence that outlines the different consumer privacy contributions?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Yes, the information about whether or not young people like privacy is not included in the sectioN

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, but i wonder if there could be any information added about Hoofnagle's background/position before you begin talking about his contributions to the field

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

No large tone / balance problems. Is there any controversy related to this man? If so, maybe include that?

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

Content is backed up by reliable sources of information & sources are relatively current given that not everything the article references is current. Links work.

MISSING A CITE FOR THE CPDP

Organization
Guiding questions:

Yes -