User:Houstontonorman/History of cross-dressing/Okiecashew Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Houstontonorman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Houstontonorman/History_of_cross-dressing?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of cross-dressing

Evaluate the drafted changes
-First few sentences: when was it generally viewed as more positively, and is there a source for that? Maybe add a century/general era and cite that. If I was reading the article I wouldn't know what time period you're talking about, what area, etc.

-I would split this paragraph up into a few smaller paragraphs

-When you say "some people" do you mean other scholars? Or people who were contemporary to whatever era you're talking about?

-You have a direct quote here without a citation, and I don't see any linked quotes. There's a citation button above the publish changes button and if you click that at the end of a sentence you can site the reference you have at the bottom

-Social order is used twice in a row to end a sentence, maybe find a different phrase and be more specific -- what order? Gender order? Roman patriarchy?

-In the Saia parts -- how the church reacted when? During the early church or now?

-I would link Tertullian to the wiki article about him -- I think christian theologian doesn't explain enough who he was (there are christian theologians now, a hundred years ago, all of different levels of importance)

-Overall I think this portion you've added lacks links or citations to external sources or other wiki articles, I see the refernece but it isn't linked. Most notable figures in Christian history, ideas like gender norms, etc. have wiki articles you can link to to add some context for readers

-I also think you've added correct and good information but it's pretty broad -- you could add some more specific examples, like which nuns, which monks, when, where, etc.

-I see that you have your refrences at the end of the article formatted differently than mine so I need to go back and look at mine to see if I'm doing that incorrectly.