User:Hrutuc/Marie Lacoste Gérin-Lajoie/PMLopera Peer Review

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(Hrutuc)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hrutuc/Marie_Lacoste_Gérin-Lajoie?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template#cite_ref-:0_3-0


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Marie Lacoste Gérin-Lajoie

Evaluate the drafted changes
I firstly want to comment on the amount of work you put into this. This is very well structured!

The content you added is relevant to the topic and demonstrates the life of Marie Lacoste Gerin-Lajoie that not many know due to having a very empty wikipedia page. The information you found on her major organizations or the ones she partook in are very important for the aspect of this class which is information on feminism.

I do believe your tone and balance are perfect, this does not seem bias nor did it read as biased at all. And this content does not attempt to persuade the reader for a view or another, it is very informative on Lacoste's goals and who she was in her life.

At some points your writing seems like it is nor sourced. An example of this is when you are talking about her publications. Here you typed:

"Her second legal work was La femme et le code civil, in 1929. She argued against the subordinate legal position of married women. In this time, women had no control over their own financial assets and no legal input into the financial affairs of their families. She wanted to grant more rights to married and separated women so they could control their own property, and act as legal guardians to minors."

This might be me but it feels like this is missing a citation. As if it was taken from some document itself. keep an eye out and let me know if this is from a text so you can cite it.

Similarly, when reading FNSJB, you write "The Federation was an early advocate for women's suffrage in provincial elections. In addition to its legal work, the Federation nationale also championed social causes such as providing milk for children and mothers, fighting alcoholism and illness, raising awareness of infant mortality, and various other issues that affected women's lives.". The only thing i have an issue with this is that it is at the top of her page describing things she did. It might be me, and if you think it is important to leave it in both places, by all means do. It just sounds repetitive to the article's introduction.

Your sources look good to me and like the variety of sources. If you decide to add more information to this, try and find another extra source s you can expand the amount of texts you used.

Besides these two things, there is probably one or two grammatical issues that I disagree with but overall great expanding of this article and great choice of what materials to input! I felt like I learned something new from reading this.