User:Hshibly/Lupis (food)/HyeyoungKimuw Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hshibly


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hshibly/Lupis_%28food%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lupis (food)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi,

I think you are making good progress so far. I liked how you used good quality sources for your article. I see you cited every sentences from the right sources and the tone of your article seems pretty neutral to me. However, I did find that the last sentence from your lead section is very similar to what is on the article. I think it will be nice if you re-word it!. Also, Other than cooking method, I think it will be nice to add different sub topics.