User:Hshibly/Lupis (food)/Zjopiniano Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hshibly


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hshibly/Lupis_%28food%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lupis (food)
 * Lupis (food)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Hsbibly! I really enjoyed reading your wiki page on Lupis :)

You added a lot of really detailed and insightful information and I think you did a great job! (Also the food looks so good)

Specifically, I really enjoyed:

- Your inclusion of the cooking method—I think it really helps readers further understand the food and it was really interesting to learn the culinary aspects behind it

- The bolded and linked words—I think it is very helpful for readers to be able to click on ingredients they may not be familiar with

- The specifics of where the food is from/can be bought—Countries within Asia are so large that simply saying "Indonesia" becomes such a broad area for interpretation. Being specific and talking about the middle and eastern Java made it more detailed and pinpointed a certain area.

Some suggestions I have are:

- Maybe add the pronunciation of the word in parentheses

- Maybe adding a recipe section with specific measurements—That way people can make the food if they want to and know how much of each ingredient is needed

- Maybe adding a specific meal or food that Lupis is eaten with

- Maybe adding an image of the middle and easter Java—That way readers can see exactly where the food is from if they're not familiar with Asia

There really isn't much I have to critique on! I think you did an amazing job of expanding from the original wiki article and it's evident you added a ton of new, really important information. The structure of the article is really organized and spaced neatly. I'm looking forward to reading it at the end of the quarter!