User:Ht231/Internet Celebrities/Yidanlong Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ht231


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ht231/Internet_Celebrities?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! Great work done! Here are some suggestions:

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - I saw that you provide your definition of wanghong in the first paragraph “Define wanghong". However, the original article put Wanghong part in the Contents but not in the lead. Your lead might not contribute to updating the original lead. Also, there are duplicated terms such as "social media influencer" and examples of social platforms "Twitch, Instagram, YouTube, Twitter, etc." which are not new information.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - The first sentence of your lead seem mainly refers to another name of internet celebrities are called in other countries instead of defining the term Wanghong only. The use of the term "social media influencers" can be the definition of "Internet Celebrities" instead of "Wanghong" in general.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? - Yes.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? - The parts of content, net idol, internet platform are also presented in the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - The lead is concise.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - Yes the content you added is relevant to the topic.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - The time range of your added resources are quite large (from 1960 to 2019).
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - No
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? - The How wanghong is compared to women from the revolutionary movement part that you are addressing is an underrepresented topic. In the first sentence you mentioned women had no equal rights as men in the old society, is it possible that you can specify when this happens with reference? The old society can be an ambiguous time.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? - Most part the content is neutral. For instance, in the Examples of how wanghong is compared to women from the revolutionary movement part, you mentioned both male and female wanghong Li Jiaqi and WeiYa as positive examples. However, the following parts are mainly concentrating on females, for instance, the woman during the revolutionary time part and women during the late-Qing Dynasty. It would seem much more neutral if you added some relevant information regarding the male wanghong.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? - No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? - No
 * Does the content add to attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? - No

Sources and References


 * Is all-new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - The resources and citations are very informative. It would be much clear to see if you can add the link to the in-text citations.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) - For instance, in Woman during a post-reform time, you wrote "Other studies have located that, despite operating in the difficult terrain of global capitalism, the socialist state, and the patriarchal family, there are acts of feminist resistance and transgression in the workplace (Ngai, 2005)." It is somehow hard for a reader to understand what is Ngai's idea and what is your argument. It would be much better if you can add more information in the citation part.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? - Yes
 * Are the sources current? - As stated above, the time range of your sources is quite large. However, several sources is published in recent years, for example, 2019. So I think the sources are partially current.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? - Most of the sources are written by book writers so I think the possibility of they are historically marginalized individuals is small.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) - Most of the sources are published articles or books which are already peer-reviewed.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? - There is no link to resources.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - Yes, the content is concise and easy to read.
 * Does the content add have any grammatical or spelling errors? - There are some grammatical errors, such as the time tense.
 * Is the content added well-organized - Yes, the contents are well organized and separated into several sections.

Images and Media


 * There is no image or media added to this article. If adding images or media could help your writing maybe it is a good idea to add some.

Overall Impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - Yes, there is much concise information about Wanghong.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? - The examples of recent wanghong part are very helpful for people who are seeking actual instance of Wanghong. It helps their understanding.
 * How can the content added be improved? - Those three parts, Women During Late-Qing Dynasty, Women During Revolutionary Time, and Women During Post-Reform Time are very informative and the sources are strong. However, there might be some concerns about how this large portion of content specifically related to the topic of Wanghong. There is a possibility that people who are exploring Wanghong might not be interested in Chinese historical female contexts.