User:Hudson1521/Far Westside, Syracuse/Emichiang Peer Review

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Hudson1521 / Miloshi525
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 * User:Hudson1521/Far Westside, Syracuse
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 * Far Westside, Syracuse

Lead
The new content added in the lead section didn’t that much, however, the sentences added are concise and clear to give the reader more overall details about Far Westside, and how this community is known for. And after adding this new content, it makes the lead section have a good amount of information and doesn’t feel too concise.

Content
The content added is all relevant to the topic. But I’m not sure about if the two paragraphs from the annexation and landmark section such as 1. Twice, entire commercial blocks along Furnace Street (now West Fayette Street) burned to the ground for lack of water and fire protection (needs sourcing). 2. When the village of Geddes joined the city of Syracuse in 1886…which is still full of oak trees, on the corner of South Avery Avenue and Whittier Avenue, etc was written by yourself or already exists in the previous article, and you decided to rearrange them? Or you will base on those to add more content on it just not added yet?

Tone and Balance
The content most added is neutral and doesn't appear heavily biased toward a particular position. However, in the Tipperary Hill part (landmarks section), you wrote "The Westcott Reservoir, an excellent sledding location, is also within its limits." I do think here's viewpoints here are not neutral because who defines this place as "an excellent sledding location?" There are no references to support this and if this is your opinion it means this sentence is not objective and needs to be revised.

Sources and References
Most of the new content you added has reliable secondary sources of information that reflect what the cited mentioned. but I do think the sources are a little bit lacking because for example, even though in the Demographics section, you have a lot of numbers and data to provide that information (which is good), however, they all come from the same site. Maybe see if there are different statistics from other sites and start research from it which demographics is the newest and most reliable. All the links I checked and they all work, nice!

Organization
The content added is well-written with clear and easy-to-read paragraphs. Almost no grammatical or spelling errors (only one or two really tiny grammatical errors but didn't affect!)

Overall Impressions
The content you added for sure improved the overall quality of the article and allowed more detailed information to support the original article, however, I do think some parts can introduce deeper (added more new content) or maybe add new sections to discuss different aspects of Far Westside. Such as if Tipp Hill is an Irish neighborhood, is there more cultural diversity that influences or affects the Far Westside of Syracuse? Has there any conflict happened in this area before?