User:Hugheann/Seaweed fertiliser/AleahHahn Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Seaweed fertiliser / Anna Hughes and Group


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * 11/15 : https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kellyshan31/Seaweed_Fertilizer?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I think this could include more general details about the whole topic. You have a good leading sentence. More details would be good.

Content: When saying the industry is on the rise again, I would say that since the year, XXXX, the industry is on the rise. I think this should be corrected throughout. When referring to 'the last 50 years' rephrase and say since the 1960's. This will allow this page to still be more correct in another 50 years.

"As such, seaweed is now a part of the United Nations global compact action plan due to its potential to meet 7 of the sustainable development goals as a growing industry" What pact is this from or what is the article/group of goals/number of goals made my the UN. 7 out of 10? 7 out of 100?

"Phosphorus is supplied inorganically as phosphate (PO43-) and generally follows similar seasonal patterns to nitrate, however," --> There should be a ; after nitrate and before however.

The content is well written and easy to understand. I think it would be useful for some grammatical errors to peer review a different persons section. Everything is well written and not biased.