User:Hugheshayne/Acute respiratory distress syndrome/Achram15 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Hugheshayne
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Hugheshayne/sandbox&oldid=920328317

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Not needed
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Concise

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? This specific section would benefit from a bit more explanation of the onset of the disease and how other illnesses increase the chances of acquiring ARDS

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Could be more concise with clearer formatting
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? The bullet points are good however the last addition could be moved up under the first mention of "pulmonary symptoms"

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? Yes however I'm not sure if all three chest x-ray images are necessary
 * Are images well-captioned? The second set of two chest x-rays could use a more detailed caption but the others are good
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Yes
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Yes

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Explanations of the causes relating to the added symptoms
 * How can the content added be improved? Content could be more concise and all bullet points kept in the same paragraph