User:Hundredjshpt/Police brutality in the United States/Tjuadiv2023 Peer Review

General info
Hundredjshpt
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

"Police brutality in the United States"


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hundredjshpt/Police_brutality_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Police brutality in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * The lead provides a great, concise definition of police brutality and its effects, addressing the issue's impact in the US.
 * It introduces the problem of police brutality but lacks specific details or statistics to contextualize the severity of the issue --> maybe include some stat/statistics to substantiate you claim.
 * The lead doesn’t outline the major sections of the article or preview what the body will cover; maybe edit this so that the reader can better know what to expect.
 * It's concise but could benefit from more depth and background information.

Article Body:


 * The article body begins by connecting police brutality to historical racial prejudice and slavery in the US, providing context for the issue.
 * It briefly mentions the role of social media and the Black Lives Matter movement in raising awareness about police violence.
 * The body highlights two significant causes of police brutality: police militarization and the war on drugs, discussing how these factors contribute to the problem.
 * The body outlines potential solutions: demilitarizing law enforcement and ending the war on drugs.

References:


 * The references provide sources for further information on police brutality, including Mapping Police Violence, Wikipedia, and The Washington Post.

Overall Impressions/Edit Suggestions:


 * The draft provides a basic overview of police brutality in the US, touching on historical roots, contributing factors, and potential solutions.
 * However, it lacks in-depth analysis, specific examples, and statistical data to strengthen its points and provide a comprehensive understanding of the issue.
 * The article lacks citations within the body, relying heavily on external sources listed in the References section. Citations should be integrated into the text to support claims made.
 * The content could benefit from a more structured organization and expansion on each point discussed, providing a more detailed and nuanced exploration of the topic.
 * To improve, consider including real-life case studies, statistical data, and expanding on the causes and effects of police brutality while integrating citations within the body for factual support.