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Article Evaluation
The article was mainly about the U.S census, the history and the future of it. In my opinion, this article kept its subjects narrow. It didn’t go overboard or off topic. I like the fact that it started with historical events of how the U.S census began and how it developed over the years. I was very distracted by the blue hyperlinks every few words. I just wanted to click on every one of them and see what information it contains. I don’t think it is a good idea to provide additional information for every couple of ideas given. It distracts the reader from focusing on the actual topic of the article. From what I have read, the article doesn’t seem biased towards the US census or the population. It contains accurate information towards how it works and its purpose. In addition, the topic under “Success and Failure” is underrepresented. I don’t believe it covered all aspects of the topic. It discussed both aspects very briefly with no examples given.

Looking at the citations of the article, they are accurate and reliable. The web-sites are still working and up to date. I did realize that the majority of the citations are coming from the U.S Census Bureau. I don’t see any citations that are out of date. There should be a link under a new section where we can view international census and compare the information for different countries. After checking out the talk page, people were asking for a source of an updated international census, as well trying to gather information based on categorizing specific races and ethnicity in the census. The article also rated low importance under government, public policy and economics. The article talks about the census from a historical perspective and how it developed over time. In class, we have discussed more depth into the importance of an updated census currently and how it can be improved for a better future. In the article, it was more of a description of the history of the census over time, it didnt highlight exactly it's purpose and how it can be improved.  Overall, good evaluation of article - Prof Hammad 

List of countries by age at first marriage Article
My article is incomplete. I am planning on expanding the article with written sections and explaining what the data means. My article only shows numbers followed by countries and gender. I will work on interpreting the data and following with reliable sources to explain what each data table means and what the actual number refer to in Global Demography studies. I am also planning on expanding the first paragraph. I don't feel like is says enough about the topic. It gave a brief description on what the article will contribute.

I am planning on using these sources for my edit of the article:
 * Uecker, Jeremy E., and Charles E. Stokes. Journal of marriage and the family, U.S. National Library of Medicine, 1 Nov. 2008, www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC2841346/.
 * Marphatia, Akanksha A., et al. “Women's Marriage Age Matters for Public Health: A Review of the Broader Health and Social Implications in South Asia.” Frontiers, Frontiers, 19 Sept. 2017, www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fpubh.2017.00269/full.
 * Parsons, Jennifer, Jeffrey Edmeades, Aslihan Kes, Suzanne Petroni, Maggie Sexton, and Quentin Wodon. "Economic Impacts of Child Marriage: A Review of the Literature." The Review of Faith & International Affairs 13, no. 3 (2015): 12-22. doi:10.1080/15570274.2015.1075757.

Article Edits
First Paragraph/Introduction:

- definition of marriage is the legally or formally recognized union of two people as partners in a personal relationship (historically and in some jurisdictions specifically a union between a man and a woman).

- Marriage is a legally recognized union between two partners in a relationship. The average age to first get married varies from one country to another and is affected by several factors such as financial stability, career, academic pursuit, and family background.

- Some countries had most recent and updated census while other countries hadn't been updated since the 1990s.

- There are different numbers ranging from early 20s to mid 30s which raises the questions of how culture, religion and social status play an enormous role of changing the age of first marriage for different countries.

Africa's Section:

- Africa has a majority of age at first marriage between age of 15 until early twenties for women and early and late twenties for males. Here’s where cultural and economic status come to play. Also, there is an age gap that older males are marrying younger females by at least 8 years of age difference.

Europe's Section:

- From the data, most of the wealthiest countries in Europe appear to have a higher average age at first marriage than their less developed counterparts. Most men and women postpone marriage in countries where they enjoy the higher social status, better education system, and employment

- In Europe, we can see a pattern of 20s/early 30s  first marriage which makes sense as a time to start a lifelong partnership with someone as well as being financially solvent enough to be able to contemplate supporting someone should the need arise.

Conclusion Section:

- In majority of the countries, females get married at a younger age than males which is said to be related to educational level and employment status.

- It has been researches that the ideal age to get married for women is mid-twenties and for males is early thirties thirties: the difference is that, after women earn their educational status which is either High school diplomas or Bachelor’s degrees, they tend to start thinking of their next goal which is settling down for a family and a decent job, which is around the age of early twenties.

-The ideal age as said is early to thirties so they have a  stable economic status to support an income of a full family to start thinking of marriage.

 These are all good additions; however, make sure to cite some of these statements properly - also needs some copy editing in many places - Prof H 

Feedback and additions to the article
I will be editing my wording of the last section under "conclusion" and reversing some words with more general vocabulary so it sounds more professional to follow.

Also, I will be adding some countries as an example under Europe's section so readers can follow up with my stats and numbers that I am including. For example, I will be adding Italy and United Kingdom as a reference of males and females age of first marriage. Since they're considered wealthy and the age ranges of late twenties and early thirties for both gender.

Under Africa, I can include Niger and Eritrea as an example of young females with older males ranging from 15 years of for women and mid twenties for males.

This is as far as the changes i will be including for my articles supporting my peer review feedback.