User:Hurlinator20/Battle At Pozo Hediondo/HeatherSchimming Peer Review

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Hurlinator20
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hurlinator20/Battle At Pozo Hediondo
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):NA

Evaluate the drafted changes
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As this is a new article, all of the information present is added by the author. With the Lead, the information is concise and provides a good overview. I like that it already includes names linked to other Wiki articles, serving as a good base for the foundation of the revision. I would say that the Lead needs a little revision in regard to grammar and sentencing. It reads a little choppy and could flow a bit more with restructuring some of the shorter sentences. It has a good balance in information, I would just go back over more grammatical tweaks.

Overall, the content is well balanced and placed throughout the article. Like the author said in their draft, a lot of work is left to be done, but the headings indicate that much of the information will cover a lot of ground. Thus, a good overview will be established. The bibliography is loaded with good, quality sources. The Resendez reading is one of the first sources, a relevant and intellectual debate on Spanish and Native interactions. Overall, the tone seems neutral and very informative. With the remaining sections needing to be written, I would strive for the same style already established.

I would definitely find ways to add photos of the people and especially place where this battle occurred. There is a lot of detail of where it happened, so I would include a photo of then and now in that same place.

Again, I would say that the bibliography shows an extensive list of new sources, meeting guidelines for Wikipedia. There are new headings and links located within the draft, connecting it with other information.

I would say the lead is definitely the strength in this draft. Once more of it becomes written, there will be more to go on. Overall, I think it's a strong start to this assignment. The headings provide an outline where the author plans to move within the information and the bibliography backs this up well. Overall, a good draft! My only suggestions on the current material would be to look over grammar again and eliminate choppy sentences and add more pictures!