User:Hvonruden13/Lewy body dementia/Cailen1 Peer Review

Peer review

 * Make sure to read what has been written out loud to make sure that it flows smoothly and sentence structure isn’t choppy. The last sentence for example (“As Lewy Body Dementia increases with age the mean age for women with the disorder is higher than that of men with the disorder.”) could be reworded to portray the information effectively and to avoid potential misinterpretation.
 * Clarify what the following sentence is relating to: “Additionally, hypertension and hyperlipidemia rates are higher in the female sex than that of the male sex.” Are these rates higher when comparing those with LBD?
 * I would consider leaving the following sentence out: “It could potentially give patients a better prognosis on what should be expected and help them prepare for the future more adeptly.” This sentence is rather opinionated with no supporting source.
 * Is there any information on incidence or prevalence rate in the United States/globally? How many new people are diagnosed with LBD each year, etc.?
 * “Further research in why dementia with Lewy Bodies has a worse comorbidity than Alzheimer dementia could be beneficial”- beneficial how???