User:Hw73171n/Individualistic culture/TheSunshineGirl Peer Review

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Hw73171n

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Individualistic_culture
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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Individualistic_culture
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Individualistic_culture

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

 * The lead is descriptive. It contains information that the reader needs to know about "Individualistic Culture."
 * Yes. The lead includes an introductory sentence that is concise and clear for the reader to understand.
 * It does include a brief description of the article's major sections.
 * No. The lead does include information that is presented in the article.
 * The lead is concise and straight to the point.

Content

 * The content is relevant to the topic.
 * The content is up to date.
 * No content is missing. It provides details about the cultural relationships and their differences followed by their behavioral expressions.
 * Yes. The article deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps and addresses the topics of historically underrepresented.

Tone and Balance

 * The content is neutral.
 * No. The article is not heavily biased on positions.
 * The viewpoints are underrepresented. Adding more sentences will help the reader to understand more about the topic and the effectiveness of one's ethnic group.
 * No. The content does not attempt to persuade readers in favor of one position.

Sources and Resources

 * Yes. The content is backed up by reliable sources.
 * The sources reflect on the overall topic of Individualistic Culture."
 * Resources are thorough. They reflect the available literature on the topic.
 * Some of the sources are not current - 1995, 2001, 2005 - although most sources are not current, it still benefits the article because it gives a timeline of how culture was depicted during those times and how it was effective worldwide.
 * Sources are written by a diverse spectrum of authors. The individuals are historically marginalized.
 * Other resources can be found on Pace Library and Google Scholar. On Pace's Library, I searched "Individualistic Culture" and found an e-book called "Liberal Rights and Political Culture: Envisioning Democracy in China." For the Google Scholar search engine, enter "Individualistic Culture." There are plenty of articles to choose from in regard to the topic.
 * The links to the website works.

Organization

 * The content is well-written. It is concise and easy to read.
 * Yes. The article contains grammatical and spelling errors.

Lead 1. "In individualistic cultures people are motivated by their own preference and viewpoints. Individualistic cultures focus on abstract thinking, privacy, self-dependence, uniqueness, and personal goals." = Put a comma after "cultures"; Remove the word "own" in front of preference; Add an "s" after "preference." 2. "The term individualistic culture was first used in the 1980s by Geert Hofsted a Dutch social psychologists to describe countries and cultures that are not collectivist, Hofsted created the term individualistic culture when he created a measurement for the five dimensions of cultural values." = Misspelled "Hofstede"; Put a comma after "Hofstede" and write "a Dutch social psychologist." 3. "To repeat, there has been a global increase in individualism in the recent years and individualistic culture is on the rise in many countries around the world. Highly individualistic countries are commonly in Western countries; like, Australia, Canada, Germany, The Netherlands, and the United States." = Remove "the" in front of "recent"; Instead of "commonly" only put "common"; Remove the comma after "like"; Remove the word "the" in front of Netherlands.

Low-Power Distance 1. "Individualistic cultures are referred to as low-power distance cultures that contains a hierarchy system, that strives for equality, and rejects inequality. Low-power distance countries are Austria, Costa Rica, New Zealand, and South Africa." = Remove the "s" from "contain"; Remove comma after "equality"; Remove the "s" from "reject."

Emotion Display and Display Rules 1. "Individualistic cultures tend to prioritize the individual person over the group and this can be seen in how the display rules vary from a collectivist culture compared to an individualistic culture." = Remove the word "individual." 2. "In an individualistic culture, self-expression is highly valued, making the display rules less strict and allowing people to display intense emotion such as: happiness, anger, love, etc. While in a collectivist culture, moderation and self-control is highly valued for the well-being of the group, and collectivist cultures therefore tend to restrain from showing emotion in public." = Add an "s" after "emotion"; Remove the semicolon after "such as"; the sentence "While in a collectivist culture, moderation and self control is" remove the "is" and put "are"; Put a common after the word "therefore."

Work-Life Family Balance 1. "In Shan Xu research he found that employees from more individualistic cultures are more sensitive to how their work interferes with their family life." = Put an "s" after "Xu" and put a comma after "research." 2. "These employees are more concerned about their own individual family dynamics and structure." = Remove the word "own individual." 3. " These employees are more focused on the overall and harmony of all those little factors and how they affect their families." = Remove the word "and."

Conflict Strategies. 1. "Since individualistic culture sets greater value to personal achievement, contrary to collectivist cultures who value harmony." = Put the word "a" in front of greater value; "to personal achievement" put "on personal achievement"; Remove the word "who" and put "which" in front of value harmony. 2. "When using competition as an approach to resolving conflict, a person is more confrontational and seeks to achieve his or her own goals with no regard of the goals of others." = After the word "regard" put the word "for." 3. "Using this approach, a person seeks domination, which means to get others to do what the person wants instead of what they initially wanted." = Where it says, "which means to get others" put the word "getting" in place of "get." 4. "On the contrary, a collectivist culture would more likely use a less confrontational approach such as accommodation to end the conflict with compromise so that each party is benefited." = In front of "compromise" put "a compromise."


 * The article is well organized. The paragraphs reflect the section-headings.

Images and Media

 * No images were added to enhance the understanding of the article.
 * No images to determine if it is well-captioned.
 * No images adhering to Wikipedia's copyright regulations.
 * No images for visual appeal.

For New Articles Only

 * The article is supported by 2-3 reliable sources and more.
 * The list is exhaustive. In total, there are nineteen sources. To add, it does represent the available literature on the subject.
 * The article follows the format of other Wikipedia articles, however. There are more section-headings than sub-headings.
 * Yes. The article can link to other websites.

Overall Impressions

 * The article is complete. More sub-headings should be added to elaborate on the assigned section headings.
 * Strengths: The lead is strong; it captivates the reader's attention and the article remains on topic.
 * For improvement, always capitalize the section headings i.e., "display" and "rules" and the word "strategies." Add more sentences to elaborate on the assigned section heading(s): "Emotion Display and Display Rules", "Marriage and Family Dynamics" including "Work-Family Balance" and "Content Strategies."