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Wiki Evaluation of Triangle Trade Article for Wikipedia

This article is flip floppy from the beginning where it address’s that the direction of the trade is directly dependent of the wind patterns that it states is called trade winds. Without any citations of any of that information, none of this information can be corroborated. In the next section titled Atlantic Triangular Slave Trade it outlines that the reasons for the trade in the order that it does in is not due to winds, its mainly supporting resource acquisition and dispersal which includes commodities and slaves. A content gap that I believe is extremely huge is when the author goes into talking about disagvantages of slave trade they don't mention anything about diseases, death, mass population relocation, or the extreme effects Africa undergoes as its population is sold off. This article does not take a biased standpoint but it can definitely be expanded on quite heavily, developing content surrounding more of the inner workings of the triangle trade then what they have done so far. In reviewing this articles talk page it is under gone massive editing. It still needs more and here are my current findings of the structural content issues.

·     The complete first portion of the article has 0 citations to back on claims about trade winds which shaped the direction of the triangles sailing paths.

·     Sentence # 2, change evolves to occurs, formulates, or happens…

·     Simply clicking on the Volta Do Mar link and reading the 2 paragraphs about the functionality of the tactic, it doesn’t have anything to do with the triangular concept. It has to do with utilizing wind patterns which is a tactical maneuver. Having pointed that out, perhaps the second illustration could have been of that instead of 2 triangle trade pics. (No citations to back up findings)

·     Atlantic slave trade sentence correction.

The best-known triangular trading system is the transatlantic slave trade, that operated from the late 16th to early 19th centuries, carrying slaves, cash crops, and manufactured goods between West Africa, Caribbean or American colonies and the European colonial powers, with the northern colonies of British North America, especially New England, sometimes taking over the role of Europe.

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The best-known triangular trading system is the transatlantic slave trade that operated from the late 16th century to the early 19th century. Through usage of the system, it transported slaves, cash crops, and manufactured goods between: West Africa, The Caribbean, The American colonies, The European colonial powers, and the Northern colonies of British North America.

·     First work cited had no mention of this information which happens to be the above sentence.

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European goods, in turn, were used to purchase African slaves, who were then brought on the sea lane west from Africa to the Americas, through the so-called Middle Passage.[2]

·     Sentence Structure

The profits from the sale of the slaves were then used to buy more sugar, which was shipped to Europe, restarting the cycle. The trip itself took five to twelve weeks.

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The profits from the sale of the slaves was used to buy more sugar, which was shipped to Europe restarting the cycle. The trips usually lasted about 3 to 4 months.

·     3rd works cited isn’t the correct link for the information given.

·     Sentence Correction

On the second leg, ships made the journey of the Middle Passage from Africa to the New World.

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On the second leg, ships made the journey through the Middle Passage from Africa to the New World.

·     Sentence Adjustment

The ships were then prepared to get them thoroughly cleaned, drained, and loaded with export goods for a return voyage, the third leg, to their home port.

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The ships were then thoroughly cleaned, drained, and loaded with export goods for a return voyage, the third leg, to their home port.

·     For citation number 6 the writer uses quotations and having read the article, I cannot find the direct quote from the text. Bad citation, and incorrect usage of quotations.

The remaining content in the Other Triangular Trades section has several punctuation mistakes. The citations on all the findings there all check out with the ISBN numbers that are linked to the books stated, however, I cannot trace the actual information without the content.