User:Hygiea10/Thābit ibn Qurra/Kasmy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hygiea10


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hygiea10/Th%C4%81bit_ibn_Qurra?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Thābit ibn Qurra

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The draft does an excellent job at conveying Thābit's significance in history. The addition of a medicine section adds even more to his importance in various fields and even had a short but interesting story of his medical exploits that provides an interesting conclusion.

For the sake of organization, I recommend that the additions made be written in bold. This would also eliminate the need for labeling, but the labeling helped in this case. In the opening and second paragraph of the biography section, it lists that he was a mathematician, physician, astronomer, and translator and made important discoveries in algebra, geometry, and astronomy. If his contribution in medicine are significant enough to warrant the creation of an entire section, consider adding this to the beginning of the biography section.

I found it helpful that the tone of the addition to the biography maintained its neutrality, yet provided a much needed context to Thābit's life concerning relevant locations and their significance. It also explains his relation to his son and grandson, Ibrahim ibn Sinan. The listing of his 150 works gives much left to research as well.

There is also a plentiful number of sources, leaving no shortage of information to comb through, so it is truly a matter of choice and prioritization, which is subjective. I am also curious of what will be added to the eponyms section other than the two things already there.

All of these themes are ones I plan to implement into my own article if it is not already done.

Respond to Peer Review
Thank you for the thoughtful feedback. I agree that the lead section of the article should be updated to include his contributions to medicine, since his works on medicine were numerous. Bolding the sections that have been edited is a good idea for a change if the bolded sections do not take away from the readability of the text (I found during my editing that changing the text to bold sometimes made hyperlinks more difficult to distinguish). I will try either changing the edits to bold or making the labelling more clear in future edits.

I agree that there are plenty of sources available for information on Thābit ibn Qurra, and I will make efforts to prioritize the sources with the most reliable information and with content not currently reported on in the Wikipedia article. The eponyms section is not something I am currently editing (it was only copy-pasted in from the main article when I was moving in the works section), so I will remove it from my sandbox for now unless I plan on making additions to the section. I also hope to further flesh out the biography and astronomy sections with more information as the semester progresses.