User:Hzara002/Neanderthal extinction/Acl370 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hzara002


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hzara002/Neanderthal_extinction?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Neanderthal extinction

Evaluate the drafted changes
No drafted changes were listed on the Sandbox Draft, so I have written a review with suggestions for the current version of the article.

Overall, the article is well written. The information is relevant to the subject, and the sources cited are reliable, from mostly from peer-reviewed journals. The body of the article is organized in a sensible sequence. I just have a few suggestions:


 * The Neanderthal extinction hypotheses in the introductory section should be listed in the same order as in the body of the article. According to the article body, this order would be: Violence, Parasites and Pathogens, Competitive replacement (Species specific disadvantages, Division of labor, Anatomical differences and running ability, Modern humans' advantage in hunting warm climate animals), Interbreeding, Climate change (Natural catastrophe), Inbreeding.
 * In the "Violence" section, the beginning phrase "Some authors have discussed..." is a bit vague, as it does not clearly state who the "authors" are. This could be reworded to something that does not mention any unnamed authors, like "One common theory..."
 * The "Parasites and pathogens" section need more citations. Most of the claims in the section are not given a citation.
 * The "Modern humans' advantage in hunting warm climate animals" section is quite disjointed. The theory of canine domestication and the theory of different hunting tendencies among Neanderthals and modern humans do not seem to blend.  Perhaps one could create two different sections (or at least two separate paragraphs) on the two subjects.