User:I-Chia Wu/Ying Liu (刘颖)/Sarahsgoh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I-Chia Wu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:I-Chia%20Wu/Ying_Liu_(%E5%88%98%E9%A2%96)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: This was a very informative lead! I would shift this section up to the beginning however and just remove the title since that is how wikipedia formats the lead. In addition, I would consider shortening this lead to just one paragraph, most leads in wikipedia are not multiple paragraphs. For the last section for honors and awards, I would just mention a few that are most famous so it doesn't take up the whole paragraph.

Content, organization: You had a lot of great information! I would move the lead up to the beginning and shift her early life and education section down. I would title her "early life" as "early life and education" so you could include her education in this section as well. I would also make each sentence a full sentence with the subject. Totally understand if you are still editing this, but I would change her career section to read more narratively in paragraphs, not just bullet points of her career. Maybe for each job or education you could talk about what she did there. Also for Awards and Honors, you might want to change the title to a plural awards to make it "Awards and Honors"

Sources and Tone/balance: I thought you had great sources! For tone and balance, I would make sure to write each paragraph with full sentences.

Media, infoboxes and overall impressions: For your awards and honors section, I would try to include a table where you can split the sections up into awards, from which institution, and year received to make it more organized for the reader. I would try adding a picture and infobox as well! Overall, I thought it was clear that you are still working on it and still editing, however I thought you had great foundational information.