User:IIOliveBranchII/Juana Paula Manso/OaklandGrizzly Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(IIOliveBranchll)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Make sure, in general to work on including the lead I the updated version of your article. Discuss more content in Manso's career and her actions in the Feminist movement because it will give more logic to what your lead mentions. You made a good discussion on her early and personal life, though maybe just mention it only briefly. An important piece of content seems to be the journal, "anales de la education", so it might be necessary to discuss about its importance in more detail rather than one sentence as it's shown. many of the viewpoints are over representing Manso's family life, between her as a child and as a mother. Much of the content, though, I feel I well broken down into different sections where each one gives a logical topic and then emphasizes on that briefly. Just some parts I feel are more important and not quite talked much about, so it'll be important to emphasize on those statements, some of which I noted previously. when adding more of these details it will likely require adding more sources to show where acquired the information.