User:IIOliveBranchII/Juana Paula Manso/PlushKangaroo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IIOliveBranchII


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Apmnicley/Juana_Paula_Manso&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Juana Paula Manso

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The original article has a very short lead that I think you would be able to expand a upon, if you have the time.

What you were able to add for the Biography is leaps and bounds better than what was there originally.

Content

The content you were able to add to the article is on topic and very clear/easy to follow.

All the content added also seems up-to-date.

Tone and Balance

The tone used in the article reflects that of a highly educated individual and doesn't seem out of place for a Wikipedia article.

Everything added to the article is unbiased and holds a overall neutral tone.

Sources and References

You have a wide variety of secondary sources that all adequately assist the article and are used appropriately.

I'm not able to click on the links but I'm 100% convinced that is a me issue, just wanted to mention it just in case you wanna double check.

Organization

Again, this article is very direct and easy to read. I didn't feel myself straining to understand sentence structures or language.

I didn't notice any spelling errors nor grammar, but I'm horrible at grammar so I'm probably not the one you should use to check it.

Images and Media

I hope you add some photos of her and maybe some photos of the journals she worked on.

I know the original article mentioned how Google Doodle celebrated her 198th birthday, i think it would be cool if you were able to include that art on her page as well.

Overall

The content you were able to add SIGNIFICALLY improved the overall article, the article will most defiantly fell more complete once some media gets added.

Obviously, if you are able to add more information about her life it'll make the article stronger. Maybe a list of her poems could be a fun thing to add!

I had a great time reading your work! Good luck and keep up the great work!