User:ILBO7water/Jung Kang-ja/Poppyprint Peer Review

*Please make sure you include proper citation!! You have so many good sources from recent publications.

Ian, this is a really promising start to an excellent article. First, it's very clearly written and your writing style is overall formal and polished :) But I think you could add some more information in terms of content - I know that this is just the beginning and we can hope that your article will be the basis for many more edited versions to come, but since you have so many good sources, I'd love to see you use them better/more.

'''Lead: Content is excellent! Just some suggestions to polish the writing (see below).'''

If you want the Korean name, it's 정강자

during (perhaps change it to "in" to avoid repetition, since you are using "during" twice in the same sentence) its formative years in the 1960s and early 1970s, during the repressive regime of Park Chung Hee. In this time she staged and participated in pieces of art (could you be more specific? Since you said "participated" - do you mean performances? I am generally not a fan of "pieces of art" or "art piece" since...a piece of what?) that challenged both current (if you mean 1960s-70s, I suggest changing it to contemporaneous to avoid confusion) artistic and cultural norms in South Korea.

Biography

Jung studied at and graduated from the College of Fine Arts at Hongik University. -> Love that you are already putting the links in. I wonder if graduate from is enough since it already suggests that she studied there? Or did she receive her BFA from there?

In terms of content - just wondering if you can add more about what happened after 1982, and a bit more about her involvement in the Fourth Group.

Work

Her work was exhibited in the Union's 1967 exhibition, which she took part in organizing. (what is "the Union"?)

As a founding member of the Fourth Group, an experimental art collective, she participated in a number of their group artworks (or performances?). 1969 saw Toilet Tissue Dress, a collaboration with fellow Fourth Group member and fashion designer Sohn Il-gwang. (what was this about?) She participated in the Fourth Group's performance (when?), The Funeral of Culture and the Art Establishment, in which the artists symbolically criticized their repressive society and, indirectly, the authoritarian government (by doing what?). Her 1970 solo exhibition (was this her first solo show?), titled Moo-Che (what does it mean?), was shut down on its third day by the government (why?).

* Wondering if you have more info on post-1970 works and reception...

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