User:Iadaniel/Sustainable packaging/Mollyyg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Iadaniel, Greengal.02, Mflloyd


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Iadaniel/Sustainable_packaging?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sustainable packaging

Evaluate the drafted changes
As I am reading the beginning of the edited article, under the section "environmental impact" I see that one line states "Sustainable packaging should," which shows some bias and opinionated phrasing. However I don't think this is a big issue, I just think it could be worded differently. In the section "House of Representatives," the first paragraph is concise and well-worded, however the first sentence of the second paragraph is confusing and grammatically incorrect. The last edited section is thorough, concise, and completely factual. Overall, the edits are professional and well-done.