User:Iamnotelmo809/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Andy Schor

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate this article because it focuses on a politician who occupies an executive position (mayor). It matters that articles like this one about politicians who fill important roles that affect the day-to-day lives of people in their constituency/jurisdiction so that citizens can be informed about their stances, past actions, and future ambitions. Prior to my formal evaluation, the page looks a bit short as the reference tab is visible without even scrolling down. I feel that it may be lacking in several areas due to the brevity of this page.

Evaluate the article
The Lead Section:


 * The lead sentence for this article is concise and covers the content that will proceed it clearly. It does include a brief description of the major article sections in the "contents" box.

Content:


 * Here is where the minuses begin to factor in for this article. The content within the article is very appropriate as it lists all of the offices and occupations that Andy Schor has held (and the one he currently holds) over his two-decade long political career; however, it doesn't go into any detail about the work he did in these positions. This is a huge void for someone who should have this information about them covered.

Tone and Balance


 * The tone of this article is neutral, though that may be due to the lack of information that is presented. The "early life" and "career" sections, which make up the article body, seem to be in correct proportion to one another.

Sources and References


 * The sources are appropriate for both the "early life" and "career" sections, and are well placed within the article. The last sentence of the second paragraph in the "early life" section details a bank he founded and two organizations that he was aboard member for, but has no citations. Given the success he has had in his career, I do not doubt that Schor actually held those offices, but something that important deserves its own citation and source.

Organization and Writing


 * Though brief, this article is well-written and organized. An average internet searcher would easily be able to read this stub without much difficulty.

Images and Media


 * The image of Andy Schor used is appropriate and clear. For someone who has no idea what Schor looks like, this is an accurate representation of him. The image is not captioned by itself, but is followed with a short overview of his current and former political offices that suffices as a "caption".

Talk Page


 * The last contribution made was in 2018, which means that any updates made since then are not discussed. This is to be expected since the article is very short and looks untouched.

Overall Impressions


 * If I were to classify this article, I would call it a "stub" because of how little information it has. This article is strong in its organization and writing, but it needs to expand the sections and add in necessary detail. I feel that many of the sentences in the "career" section could serve as topic sentences for paragraphs. For all of his positions as a public official, there are probably popular sources in the local news that could hold information on what he did/ has done as a politician. The same goes for his non-political offices, but instead looking for impacts of the services that his organizations provided that were cycled in the local/state news. More on his personal story could possibly be found through interviews (if he has any). All of these places where information can be found likely have media that could be included in this article also. Overall, this article has great potential; additional information and proper citing would greatly add to this article which is underdeveloped as of now.