User:Ibell3772/Preah Khan Kompong Svay/Kbee2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ibell3772


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ibell3772/Preah_Khan_Kompong_Svay?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

lead

- does not talk about what is going to be included in the article

- does not flow very well- mention the variations in the site name using "or" each time. Maybe use slashes or break it up into different sentences

- did good job at introducing site and the size of the site

content

- in some cases you mention someone or something but dont describe who they are (Suryavarman?) (when was the posy Bayon period) etc

- I liked the sections you included, if they are expanded upon

tone and balance

- content was neutral and unbiased

-I wouldn't include all uppercase words

sources and refenrces

- alot of references!

- most of the sources are relatively current so most likley up to date with the site

organization

- I couldn't really follow the flow of the sections/ why you put them in specifically. Why was iron production important/ maybe put the site section after the history and include the rediscovery of the complex as part of the history

- work on sentence flow (adding transitions, more clear/shorter sentences)

- Some sections seem like they are completely random- tie them together more maybe in the lead section

good job overall!