User:Icteridae/Bird–skyscraper collisions/PlatOccidentalis Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Icteridae


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Icteridae/Bird–skyscraper collisions
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bird–skyscraper collisions

Lead
Good lead sentence! I think it can be combined with the second one since you are saying somewhat similar things in the first two sentences -> more urbanization, more development, more landscaping and exterior glass.

Is there a reason to only include USA and Canada? Are there statistics that are more global?

Content
The "susceptible species" section is written really well and has a lot of great information in it!

In the section "light emissions," I would avoid using the phrase "we do know that..."

The first sentence of "solutions" is rather vague, I think it would be helpful to expand upon the exact legislation or recent developments, even if it's very brief in this sentence.

Tone and Balance
All of the information is well-balanced, factual, and neutral!

Sources and References
Maybe add a citation to the last sentence of the paragraph: "variables of window collisions."

Citation for the last few sentences discussing urban greenspaces and structures near areas supporting high bird density in the section "building properties."

Organization
The structure this is organized in is great! Great break-up of the sections!

Images and Media
I'm not sure if this is necessary, but maybe add citation / context to the photo of the building in the "solutions" section?

I would love to see more images to break up the section outlining the variables of window collisions!