User:Idelmund/Mask refusal/Harnieri Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Idelmund


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Idelmund/Mask_refusal?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mask refusal

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content

The content added is relevant to the topic of mask refusals. To be able to understand how one can refuse to wear a face mask, you need to understand how face masks were first introduced to the public. The information added is relevant as it gives the legal background of face masks. The content about Jacobson v. Massachusetts appears to be talking about vaccines rather than face masks. It might be helpful to explain why this is relevant to face masks.

Tone and Balance

The added content has a neutral voice. The information dos not come across as biased towards a particular position. It is neutrally explaining the history of the government rehiring face masks in certain events. There is nothing trying to persuade the reader in favor of one position.

Sources and References

All of the references are to reliable sources. The information is accurate based on what is stated in the sources. All the sources are current. The links to the sources all work. It may be better to link a government website containing the U.S. Code rather using Cornell as the source. Otherwise, there is a good variety of different sources used.

Organization

The writing is concise and clear and easy to read. But, there is the use of quotes in the article. Wiki usually does not like to have quotes in their pages; consider changing this. The organization is good as it starts from the beginning of the history of masks to current masks regulations/laws.

Images and Media

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Overall impressions

Overall, I think this is a really good addition to the mask refusal article. I think it is important to understand the legal background for implementing face masks to understand the concept of mask refusal. I think the article is strong in its neutral tone. I think the improvement can come from the organization or flow of the article. I think explaining why the information about vaccine mandates was included can help the flow of the article. Otherwise, I think it was great.