User:Idm123/Caudal luring/TV2424 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Idm123 (reviewed by TV2424)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Idm123/Caudal_luring?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Caudal luring

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Idm123! These changes look excellent. The lead is a nice concise summary of the behavior, all the information is relevant, however, the last sentence (This behavior is seen in snakes, primarily juveniles, sharks and eels ) is a little awkward, perhaps you could consider something like "this behavior is primarily seen in juvenile snakes, mature snakes, sharks, and eels", otherwise this is great. The topics in the remainder of the article are all relevant, some references could be added to the statements in the "snakes" heading. In addition, the first two sentences of the second paragraph in the "snakes" section are repetitive and don't elevate one another so maybe consider removing one of the two or find a way to make the two sentences flow into one. There is a nice array of references, some current and some fairly old, and the writing seems to be accurately reflecting the information written. In the evolution section, you may want to consider adding a few references there as well! The tone of the article is neutral and does not feel like you are trying to persuade me to believe this behavior. The photo in the top is nicely placed and is relevant to the article. Overall, I think this is a great start, and hopefully my feedback along with the other feedbacks can help your contribution to Wikipedia.