User:Igct27/sandbox

Peer Review by Isaiah Cody
-- Early Life and Education

- My immediate thought is that there is more content than the original edit which is obviously good. Often is the case, the more information the better.

- I like how there are sentences that provide an implicit timeline, though, as a person who likes everything clear and cut, which not everyone does, I would suggest adding dates to accompany those implicit statements which would provide a definitive timeline.

- Just in terms of writing style, I would suggest meshing some sentences together. Right now there are a lot of short sentences. The paragraph may flow a bit better if some of those shorter and similar ideas were combined.

- I like the transition from Early Life and Education to World War I.

Synopsis
- Stated that his contributions to bio-luminescence got him inducted into the National Inventors Hall of Fame in 2007.


 * What is bio-luminescence? (link?)
 * What is the National Inventors Hall of Fame and who organizes/heads it? (link?)

- He is one of the 100 most distinguished African American scientists of the 20th Century.


 * Says who?

Guidance Questions
Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?


 * For the most part. In the article starting with "Then, in 1958..." the end of the article seems to go off on a bit of tangent. It provides what seems like important information it's just that it seems like it should be stated somewhere else or be shorter and then linked to a more appropriate area.

Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?


 * I think the information there is relevant but given the fact that his contributions to bio-luminescence is what got him inducted into the National Inventors Hall of Fame, I think there should be more about this and would even go as far to say that it should have it's own section.

What else could be improved?

Igct27 (talk) 16:54, 22 February 2019 (UTC)
 * For being such an accomplished man, I feel as though there should be many more sections. Those sections should be clear and cut.

Jacobus Kapteyn
Kapteyn was born in Barneveld to Gerrit J. and Elisabeth C. (née Koomans) Kapteyn, and went to the University of Utrecht to study mathematics and physics in 1868. In 1875, after having finished his thesis, he worked for three years at the Leiden Observatory. In 1878 Kapteyn was inducted as the first professor of astronomy and theoretical mechanics at the University of Groningen. Also at Groningen, he founded the Astronomical Laboratory in 1896 and consequently became the director of the facility. Kapteyn fulfilled both occupational roles as professor and director at Groningen until his retirement in 1921. In 1888 he became a member of the Royal Netherlands Academy of Arts and Sciences.