User:Iisabellasanch/Environmental issues in the Philippines/Thomas Simbo K. Peer Review

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lisabellasanch


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 * User:Iisabellasanch/Environmental issues in the Philippines


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 * Environmental issues in the Philippines

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'''Most notorious of these typhoons occurred in the Cebu region of the Philippines in December of 2021. Known colloquially as Typhoon Odette, Typhoon Odette caused billions of dollars in infrasturcture and agricultural damages and displaced millions of people- destroying their homes and leaving them without adequate food or water supplies. (I like how you added the consequences of the typhoons. If you could find more precise data on their estimated cost impact in terms of dollars but also people evacuated etc. (ex: 2 millions of people instead of just "millions of people") The physical and economic repercussions of Typhoon Odette not only illustrate climate injustice in the Philippines, but also illustrate how government responses to these natural disasters directly influence the severity of them.''' (Explaining why this is the case will improve this section. Finding a source/adding something that is in the cited source or some examples on the way the government responded to a specific disaster will help us understand your statement)

In addition to the Philippines' close proximity to the Pacific Ocean's typhoon belt(That's a good addition and transition from the previous paragraph. It makes it smooth), [...] Aside from geography, climate change impacts previously colonized and currently colonized regions the most.  More specifically, "the adverse impacts of climate change [are] most striking in developing countries because of their high dependence on natural resources, their geographical and climatic conditions and their limited capacity to effectively adapt to a changing climate." (I would consider rephrasing: "the adverse impacts of climate change [are] most striking in developing countries because of their" in your own words and start the quotation at "high dependence on natural resources..." )

 Since Low-income countries have a history of colonialism and resource exploitation, (leading to an) ''' their environment lacking the diversity necessary to prevail against natural disasters. A lack of biodiversity, in other words, reduces the resilience of a specific region- leaving them more susceptible to natural disasters and the effects of climate change.  With its history of Spanish colonization, the Philippines, thus, is not environmentally or  (nor) economically equipped to tackle and overcome (issues it is currently dealing with such as) natural disasters or ( and) climate change. This inability to recover (to environment impacts)  only exacerbates the problem, creating a cycle of environmental and economic devastation''' (in the country).

Overall :

Your added part fits nicely to what is already in the article and is relevant to the topic. It is easy to read and I like how you also discuss low-income countries in general and applying this to a specific region (the Philippines). Your sources are well used. However, I thing adding 1 source will help improving the section, and will provide more information - maybe on specific impacts of a natural disaster in the Philippines or the consequences of colonialism on the lack of diversity.

It is well-written and only minor changes in sentence structure were suggested. The breakdown is good.

Overall, I think the work you did improves the section and article. The content is concise, interesting and easy to read as a whole. I believe the best way to improve the article is adding 1 more scholarly source that give example on the topic you discuss.