User:Iitzelrod/User:JZilch/Evelyn Ashamallah/Iitzelrod Peer Review

General info
Justin Zilch
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:JZilch/Evelyn Ashamallah
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Evelyn Ashamallah

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead, the content has been updated to provide additional information regarding the artist. The paragraph introduces the topic, although I feel like the article would flow smoother starting with a mini introduction dedicated to the artist and her work. For example, keep "Evelyn Ashamallah (Arabic: إيفيلين عشم الله) is a female Contemporary Coptic artist." and pull from the Art paragraph "Her work is who is known for its playfulness and ability to evoke a magic fictitious legend where each painting tells a story." This is just an idea, but I think something similar to this would separate two different topics, which is art and her personal life. Maybe adding another section made specifically for the artists personal life would be a good idea, this includes information regarding her spouse and children. I think this would make the lead concise and not overly detailed.

For Content, in comparison to the original wiki article posted, a lot of information has been added, which is a really great start. For the art section, maybe link both of her influences and elaborate more on how their work influenced hers. There are only a couple sections that do need to be cited: Artworks, Group Exhibitions (local and international), and Official Collections. I'm sure they are still adding stuff because it is a lot of research to do. The content seems to be up to date and there is no equity gaps. or underrepresented populations in the article.

The Tone and Balance, the information that has been added remains neutral and does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another. Their are no claims that are heavily biased towards any position or any sources, However I think the viewpoint of the artist regarding her art is underrepresented. There's a long list of names of her many artworks provided in this article, but there is no context provided about the artwork, so maybe adding a summary about an exhibition or collection would help represent the artist more.

There are good sources in this article. They are all reliable secondary sources that reflect what the cited sources say. The sources could be more thorough. The sources are current. They are written by a diverse spectrum of authors. Most articles that I tried looking for were smaller articles but I found one that gives some incite on the artists work- https://www.cairo360.com/article/arts-culture/6-contemporary-arts-20-years-of-evelyn-ashamallah-by-evelyn-ashamallah/

All the links provided work

Organization is good, it is easy to read, and there are no grammatical errors. I do like that is is broken into different sections.

For images and media, I see images attached that show examples of her work. I want to know what the work looks like, What is she portraying? Is there a meaning behind it? etc. Sometimes it is really hard to find good sources that up to date, and maybe it might be hard to even find sources on this artist, so I think attaching one image of work and talking about a piece that sums up most of her work would make a huge difference in this area.

For the newer articles, they do meet wikis notability requirements. There are a list of sources, but like already mentioned it could be more thorough. The article does follow similar patters to other wiki articles. There are also other links that make it discoverable to other wiki articles.

Overall impressions the article is good, there is a lot of information to work with. I think the main thing is adding images of artwork if possible would be great and maybe adding a little more context regarding artwork of artist.