User:Ikhan-rollins/Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind (film)/Lkhk32 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Imran-@Ikhan-rollins and Ian-@Ian F Whitman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ikhan-rollins/Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind (film)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind (film)
 * Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind (film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Imran and Ian! Here is my peer review for your Wikipedia article:

Overall my impressions of your article are quite positive. The strengths of your content rely on the relevance of your topic within the ecological integrity of the movie. Also, there is a neutral tone between the claims you have made about the animal species and their emotional capacity. The use of examples allows the reader to understand more clearly when discussing the compassion between the animal species as you mention the Ohms stampeding to protect their young in the film. Lastly, your writing was concise, clear and easy to read and understand, and well organized; as you guys introduced the animal species’ emotional capacity in the first paragraph, and further developed about how the emotional capacity of the species are influenced by their environment.

However, in the case of weaknesses of your content, I would say that there are some minor spelling and grammar mistakes such as in “In Nausicaä of the Valley of wind the animals species presented are fictional being’s”, where I believe it should be “In Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind the animal species presented are fictional beings”, in “they’re” I would put it as “they are” to stick with a formal language, and in “it’s reactions” I would change it to “its reactions”.

Since the article only relies on one source, one could infer that the commentary provided might be limited. Adding a diverse bibliography will let the reader know that your content is trustworthy and veridic. If possible I would add more reliable sources to back up the facts given, in addition to the only source you used. Additionally, the commentary could have resorted to expanding your main topic. You could contrast or add more information to your paragraphs by talking about the opposite situation in the movie or for example, you could probably talk about the Toxic Jungle and how it affects the overall interactions in that ecosystem and use examples of the negative relationships.

I believe that by taking into account and possibly applying these recommendations, your content will improve the overall quality of the article of your movie choice.