User:IllyFerg/Neolithic decline/Bella.daly6 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IllyFerg/Neolithic decline


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:IllyFerg/Neolithic_decline?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Neolithic decline

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The current article is very short and provides very little information. This allows for the editor to truly make decent changes. The first section had to little to none useful information, which I would think in current society there is better information regarding the Neolithic decline.

The editor has provided more detailed information they plan to add in the Plague section of the article. Adding that the Plague could have aided in this decline is a smart decision and is very likely to be the truth. I also agree that adding information such as evidence from human teeth and similar sites found in China could be very beneficial. This will help the reader get a better grasp on this topic. The editor has lots of information on why many people believe this decline was related to the Plague. All evidence and examples should be added into the article in order to clear any confusion.

I also think adding more background information and how the decline changed the course of history would also be helpful. Many people are not fully aware of the Neolithic decline, and so adding any information that could possibly help clear confusion is the way to go.