User:Ilytehani/Achatinella fulgens/MishaC22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ilytehani


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ilytehani/Achatinella_fulgens?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * I really like how you started off your article with providing the Hawaiian name of your species
 * You very clearly introduce your species which is nice since I am able to tell right away what your article is going to be about
 * One thing that I would maybe suggest changing is taking the last sentence in your lead about how their shells were used to make leiʻs, and maybe putting it in a "Human Use" section.
 * Another suggestion is maybe go more into detail about what kind of habitat they live in
 * You have a good amount of sources
 * I really liked how you added a section that includes predators and threats
 * I also really liked how you added a section for Hawaiian stories and I think people will really enjoy reading that section