User:Im.Hussein/Akitiq Sanguya/Mirandamc Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Im.Hussein


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Im.Hussein/Akitiq Sanguya


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Akitiq Sanguya

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The information presented is very clearly organized by works and projects the person has done and written in a neutral and matter of fact way. Multiple sources are used and the additional content does add more depth and clarification on who the article is about. The new content being added shows that advocacy for the Inuit people was important to this person and how she went to create her art pieces and what they symbolized in her culture. The background information on the Inuit and their hardships as well as advocacy also show how her art works symbolize all parts of her culture and how she is continually retelling and sharing her people's stories. The sources also show where some of her pieces have been on display and even what some of them look like.

I would say that the additional content could be improved by adding more background on the person herself and what she went through, just to make the lead section more specific instead of the generalized Inuit peoples. I would also add if she is still working today or of there are any modern art pieces of hers and what they symbolize. Also going back to the dolls she makes, why did she make them? Was there a more specific reason for them and why did she use the materials (like stone)?

But, overall, the additional content is good and really does help the article quality.