User:Imakespaghetti29/All or nothing disclosure of secrets/BunnyShampoo Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)Imakespaghetti29
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Imakespaghetti29/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?  N/A
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? No
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? concise

Lead evaluation: The lead is concise. It does not have a brief description or introductory sentence of the article's major sections.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? N/A
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? It is like an essay.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? no

Content evaluation: There is no citation for the content. The content is being told like a story or an essay. It doesn't have equity gap.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? The wikipedia uses words such as "Let's and similarly"
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Tone and balance evaluation: There is no bias, but it feels like a narrated tone for a story rather than facts about the content. The tone is not "encyclopedic."

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? N/A
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?N/A
 * Are the sources current?N/A
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?N/A
 * Check a few links. Do they work?N/A

Sources and references evaluation: There are no sources

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Concise. Unclear on some things
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Little to none grammatical and spelling error
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?Yes

Organization evaluation It is organized into sections and told with little errors. The topics are concise but it is hard to understand without much introduction on what each

topic means.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation: No images

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? No
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? N/A
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? No
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? N/A

New Article Evaluation: There are no sources

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added? There is a scenario to imagine in each cases.
 * How can the content added be improved? I think the content and lead can be more descriptive for those that do not fully understand the topic but wants to do research on this.

Overall evaluation: I think the content and lead can be more descriptive for those that do not fully understand the topic but wants to do research on this.