User:Imnotalpacino/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Fayum mummy portraits

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I found the article by searching through the lists that were provided. I ended up choosing the article because I have always been fascinated with ancient Egypt.

Evaluate the article
My overall impression was that the article was at a basic functioning level. The author delivered everything in a factual and non-biased way and the lead section of the article clearly demonstrated what was going to be talked about in the article. I think that maybe a few more details could be placed into the lead though. The content was interesting and covered the topic pretty well and felt very consistent throughout the entire article. However, I do think that the writing was simple and felt a little choppy at times. I enjoyed that the authors added sections about the clothing and hairstyles that we see in the portraits. There are also lots of images that help to demonstrate what the article is describing and there are many different portraits which I appreciate. When looking at the talk page, there is a lot to read. At first I thought that this may be a red flag for the article, but all of these corrections and comments have helped make it a stronger article. There was some conflict between sources and information from sources but that has been sorted out. One thing I saw is that the bibliography is in chronological order, but I don't know if that makes sense? I thought that it should be organized by the author's last name because I think that would be easier for people to find.