User:Imperialrussia1/Bezdna unrest/Reidy3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Imperialrussia1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Bezdna unrest


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bezdna unrest

Evaluate the drafted changes
The updated version compared to the older page is already much more organized, expanded, and informational. Especially prevalent is the chronological structure included that makes for an easy read in following the led up, actual event, and aftermath. The only suggestion I would make for the general outline of the article would be to move the "Explanation for the Uprising" higher up instead of at the very end, since I thought it provided valuable context that made reading about the event and its aftermath easier to understand. The content within all of these sections, exempt the ones still being worked on, are well written and composed to the point where great detail is covered without trending off topic. The tone seems neutral to me. There were some typos, such as "Aton instead of "Anton", as well as some sentences that could combined for smoother reading, however I assume all of these minor issues would be resolved upon further review by the author before publishing. I could not see any of the sources in the sandbox, so I was unable to verify any sources added, however the original articles five sources all seem to be quality. Besides sources, the only other dimension I would comment on would be photos/graphics. Understandably not in place with the article being incomplete, but for in the future, I think graphics or images always add substance to these articles.