User:ImplicitPandemonium/Naqada/A Small Rat Peer Review

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ImplicitPandemonium
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:ImplicitPandemonium/Naqada
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Naqada

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Only the Archaeology section is edited, and it is expanded upon really well. The third paragraph, second line is a run-on sentence that should be shortened or edited in some way. The rest of the information is very informative and provides a lot more information on the burial sites located in Naqada. I would maybe add some information on who and how the site was discovered, if you can find that information. If not, not a big deal. I would also add a few pictures of the site or the landscape if you can find any in WikiMedia.