User:Imwesley/First Sudanese Civil War/Mitchellf689 Peer Review

Mitchell Floyd's Peer review
I am reviewing Welsey Im's article about the First Sudanese Civil War.

First Sudanese Civil War

The lead has not been updated but the existing lead provides a good overview of the subject. But since the proposed edits have changed some of the major sections and added some new ones, it might be a good idea to update the lead to reflect these change. Perhaps a focus on each of the new subheadings -the background, course of the war and impact- would be the best course of aciton.

The added content is all relvant to the topic and up-to-date. The new content largely focuses on giving context for the conflict, as well the contention in the north and south about the causes. It also adds information about the ramifications of the conflict and its impact on the eventual outbreak of the Second Sudanese Civil War.

The tone appears neutral and unbiased. There was a deliberate effort to include different persepctives, especially the different viewpoints in Northern and Southern Sudan. made a deliberate effort to include the different perspective of the conflict.

All the new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources which draw on a variety of books and academic articles. The links work and lead to the source material without issue.

The content is well written and logically breaks down the different subheadings into sections.

The proposed edit does not include new pictures, though the author made sure to note that they made an effort to find new pictures and were unable to find anything relevant to the article.

Overall, the proporsed edits improve the quality of the article. They add new information regarding the beginning of the First Sudanese Civil War and its aftermath while including several different viewpoints and sources to back it up. It reorganizes the existing information into a more logical timeline.

One thing which would improve the content would be the addition of a new lead which incorporates the new information and provides an outline for the article based on the added sections and subsections.