User:Inahong/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Maat

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate this article since I believe there are other important parts in it that has not been fully develop, for instance, the section discussing scribes. It requires more detail as talking about literacy practice of ancient time needs to expose not only the artifacts, but also the people crafting them. So this part would likely be my Wikipedia edit.

Evaluate the article

 * Lead Section: When the lead section reflects conciseness, it does not cover some descriptions of major section (afterlife, principles). But overall, I think the lead section is great. It contains clear introductory sentence.
 * Content: I have no issue with the overall content. It might be an unprofessional evaluation, but I think readers who do not have background in anthropology, archaeology, or history could find the information presented useful and easily understandable. But some improvement would help. The major section “Principle” does not seem to reflect its subsection “Law” and “Scribes”, and “Scribes” needs more details added to make it equally represented.
 * Tone and Balance: No issue on tone and balance.
 * Resource and References: Second paragraph in “History” need reference.
 * Organization and Writing Quality: The article is easily understandable showing that it is well written, but a section about “Assessors of Maat” probably needs to stand alone, not being the subsection of “42 Negative Confessions” as both coming from different artifacts and explain different subjects although they are deeply related.
 * Images and Media: No issue on images and media
 * Talk Page Discussion: The article is rated C and part of WikiProject Ancient Egypt
 * Overall Impression: The article is developed but requires some edits and details.

Comments from Dr. V
hello - Thank you for your work evaluating this article. This would be a good article to work on for our main Wikipedia project and you have already identified a number of places for improvement.

+Improving/developing the Principle section, especially in regards to information about scribes +Adding reference/content to History section +Organization of headings and subheadings (such as you've mentioned about "Assessors of Maat") +Revision of the lead so that it forecasts the major content of the article

I also think that you should look for additional sources outside of what we read for class and then compare information presented in those sources to what exists in the Wiki article. This will help you to find gaps and add additional content.

There are a few other students interested in working on this article, so I would suggest that you all have a common sandbox page to draft your additions. Please do that here: User:Sashaalexa/Maat

DarthVetter (talk) 17:05, 10 February 2021 (UTC)