User:Inmh/House of Romanov/Imperialrussia1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Inmh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Inmh/House_of_Romanov?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * House of Romanov
 * House of Romanov

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi. Here is my peer review. I hope it helps.

Lead Section
I'm assuming you'll add this in later. At present the lead is the first sentence from the lead of the existing Wikipedia page.

Content

 * Good job on finding content that is backed up by sources from scientific journals. Your content is relevant and it seems to be mostly up to date. In terms of content I read that they found the remains of the missing Romanov children. Consider looking into that.
 * Also, I'm a little concerned about your topic. The issue is that much of your information already exists on the House of Romanov and Execution of the Romanov family Wikipedia pages. Maybe talk to Professor Goff about this. Maybe consider finding a specific topic about the Romanovs that isn't on Wikipedia yet or isn't covered much. Consider looking into the Pauline Laws Wikipedia page (that one doesn't have much). Consider looking into these pages as well to see if you'd want to work on any of them.
 * Maria Dolgorukova
 * Eudoxia Lopukhina

Consider rewriting the sentence "Also, striped material was found that appeared to have been from a blue-and-white striped cloth; Alexei commonly wore a blue-and-white striped undershirt." Remember that we can't connect the dots like that for Wikipedia specifically. One of our past training videos said not to do this as it could be said the fabric belonged to someone other than Alexei. Consider removing that part.

Tone
The article is well written and your tone seems neutral.

Sources and References
Good job finding sources. It's great that you found those scientific sources for your information. Those sources are best for this particular topic ((execution of the Romanovs). Here are a few suggestions.


 * Consider creating separate sections for references and the bibliography. I think the references section should only have the citations with the numbers. The bibliography should list the sources. At the moment, both are being done under the reference section.


 * You have 5 sources at the moment. I would search a little more to find a few more sources. Consider replacing "17 July 1998: The Funeral of Tsar Nicholas II. https://www.romanovfamily.org/funeral.html." with a secondary source.
 * Some information does not have a citation yet. Here are a few examples.

The investigation concluded that Alexei and one Romanov daughter were missing.

The area where the remains were found was near the old Koptyaki Road, under what appeared to be double bonfire sites about 70 meters (230 ft) from the mass grave in Pigs Meadow near Ekaterinburg.

At the Cathedral, the remaining Romanov family hosted a formal funeral for Tsar Nicholas II attended by many relatives and representatives from nations worldwide.

Organization

 * Consider altering the flow by organizing your sections as execution then remains then contemporary Romanovs.

Overall impressions

 * Good job on getting a draft in with good sources. The content itself is good but talk with Professor Goff about it. I wouldn't want you to waste time on a topic already covered quite extensively on Wikipedia. I hope this helps.