User:InnocentSplit/Joseph Konde-Lule/Sora360 Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? InnocentSplit
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:InnocentSplit/Joseph Konde-Lule

Lead evaluation
The lead is very clear about who Joseph Konde-Lule is and why he is "notable." It also concisely covers the rest of the article - his Ugandan background and his specific field of study - without being too overly detailed.

Content evaluation
Content is relevant, both on the subject and the context.

Tone and balance evaluation
I thought the tone was neutral and factual rather than being based on opinion or analysis.

-Uganda created "one of the most extensive AIDS education programs in Africa" in part due to the targeted mitigation strategies crafted from the work conducted in Rakai starting in 1989 --> it may be helpful to include who considered this quote, like "According to ____"

-"It is generally accepted that the decline of HIV prevalence in Uganda" -- generally accepted by whom?

Sources and references evaluation
Every link worked + good use of multiple sources.

Organization evaluation
Great structure to separate details of his background - that focuses more on his titles and an overview of his career chronologically - from the details of his research work. Very clear language.

-"holds degrees as a Bachelor of Medicine and Bachelor of Surgery" - should that be "holds degrees in Bachelor of Medicine" ?

-"Now retired, Dr. Joseph Konde-Lule has amassed over seventy-two publications to his name, many of them focusing on understanding social determinants of HIV and its spread within Uganda." - I wonder if instead of  'now retired' ,  'throughout his career' would fit in better with the chronology, and then ending the "Background" section with when he retired.

-"Research in Rakai, Rural Uganda" - between the first and second paragraphs, it may help to clarify if Dr.'s work was part of the Rakai Project.

Images and media evaluation
Great pictures. I wonder if it would be possible to find a picture of Dr. Konde-Lule.

New Article Evaluation
Article is notable & good use of links.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
Strong article in its clear, neutral content - and still highlights his notability and contributions. Very organized and logical. Good work!