User:Inspiration 2.0/Esplanade Ave./Mariocartlover Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Inspiration 2.0


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Inspiration 2.0/Esplanade Ave.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Esplanade Avenue, New Orleans

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far, you have a strong lead, but maybe you could add 2 more sentences, so that it could cover the entirety of what your article is about. The one sentence is really good, but I think you should add a little bit more. The content up-to-date and relevant! So your tone is good, but its a lot more like a research paper, phrases like "Since, this street is basically a long and straight line" could just say "since this street is a long, straight line". Or the phrase "fun fact" can be removed. I like it, but I think it inflicts too much of your tone, therefore making the reader think there's some bias. It could also affect how the information is received. Your sources and references are great and all the links work. I think your organization is good, but maybe you could have "Attractions" be one big category and have restaurants, hotels, museums, cemeteries, etc. because I think restaurants can be considered an attraction. I think it was well written, except for what I said about your tone (no offense), but I think all the information was there. The image you selected was great! Your article is great with everything except having a link to other articles. You can put links where you include information about other street names, restaurants, museums, New Orleans, Louisiana, etc.

Overall Impressions: I think your article's information is great! The only major things you need to fix are your tone (which you can just delete some words, so I don't think it's too bad) and just add links to other articles! Great Job!