User:InstantPineapple/The Darkest Child/Bmharden2 Peer Review

General info
InstantPineapple
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3AInstantPineapple%2FThe_Darkest_Child&wvprov=sticky-header
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Kate, this is great work! What a huge undertaking to create a Wikipedia article from scratch. This article is very strong, and it is hard to find anything to critique. I definitely want to read The Darkest Child after reading your article.
 * Maybe the only critique I have would be to run your article through Grammarly just to make sure you catch any small grammar mistakes.
 * For example, when you say, "the book opens on..." shouldn't it be, "the book opens with...?"
 * When you say, "Tangy Mae and Martha Jean and teaching Edna and Laura to jump rope" shouldn't it be, "Tangy Mae and Martha Jean are teaching Edna and Laura to jump rope..."
 * Don't forget to complete the sentence at the end of the "Sam" character section.


 * The character section is very strong. I enjoyed reading it.
 * Would it be possible for you to do one sentence or so after each theme, explaining how it connects to the novel? I know time is running out, but I would be interested to read that.
 * Like I said, great work! Very enjoyable read!