User:Intellectual pixie/Lyric Shen/LWTWT Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Intellectual pixie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Intellectual%20pixie/Lyric_Shen?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The 'Lead' is concise and straightforward, but more information pulled from the sources cited there could be helpful in giving a better overview and first look at the artist. The "Article body" has a nice neutral tone, explaining the artist's work and background efficiently, and all of the citations work perfectly. Also, putting the dates alive as up until 2022 could be misleading (unless they actually have passed away). It might be more clear to just say "present".