User:IqraSajjad1/Torwali Language/19dakota19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IqraSajjad1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Torwali language


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added by my peer. The lead includes a very interesting introduction sentence that concisely & clearly describes the topic. However, the lead does not include a brief description of the other sections. I could not find the main article for this language so I am not sure whether it contains information from it or not. The lead is overall concise & not too overly detailed. The content that was added is pretty prevalent to the topic, however it is heavy on the actual words of the language. The content seems pretty up to date, with references from 2019. I feel like there is a lot of content missing. More information on the culture should be present & less on the spelling & pronunciation of words in this language. This article does not deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps. All content is neutral & unbiased, however there is an overrepresentation of the actual language & an underrepresentation of the culture. All of their information is cited by reliable sources & accurately represents the sources information. The sources are current & through, however a few of the sources are from the same person; Zubair Torwali. The links work, & all of the references are the ones I researched, there are not many others to be used. The content is easy to read with no spelling or grammatical errors. It is organized, but there are really no sections organizing the different topics. There are 2 images on this page. Both images have clear captions & adhere to Wikipedia's guidelines. They both are interesting & relate to the subject. This article still has some way to come, but it is on a great path. The amount of sources is definitely a strength, but I would work on different sections.